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Papi
06-01-2008, 11:02 AM
Still not done, but so far, this is what I have...


To whom it may concern:

I am writing this letter in support of petition I-130 which I have filed for my wife, Ms. NoName NunyaBiz, and asking that she be granted legal residency to the United States of America. Ms. NoName and I were married on August 9, 2003, after just over a year of serious dating. We have lived together since the time of our marriage, and have grand plans in the future, including children and beginning to have our family. In over four years of marriage, our love has grown stronger daily, and dreams have grown larger, and the strength of our relationship is without boundaries.


INTRODUCTION

The purpose of my letter is to demonstrate the hardship my wife and I would be subject to if we were unable to pursue our dreams and life together in the United States. My wife voluntarily left the United States after filing the I-130 as a show of good faith, and we have been in contact via telephone almost every day. It has been very difficult for us to be apart after living with each other for the past four years. We have become accustomed to a life together, eating together, sleeping together, going shopping together….all of the little things in life that many take for granted.


EMPLOYMENT

I have been employed by the same company for over twelve years, and have received several promotions and prestigious awards over the past few years as a result of very, very hard work, and many sleepless nights. My wife is unable to work in Mexico right now, because she is living with her family in a very remote area where employment opportunities are very scarce. In addition to paying my rent, utilities, student loan, car and insurance payments, and other daily expense, I am financially obligated to send money to my wife in order to help her with her daily expenses, due her inability to find employment.

As I mentioned, I am the recipient of several very prestigious awards from the A CERTAIN PLACE. I have become very established in my industry, and am well known in the state of Ohio for my accolades. It would be very difficult to find employment in Mexico with a salary comparable to the salary I am earning in the United States. As stated in the letter provided by my employer, I play an “intricate” role in my company’s daily operations. I am a general manager for company called PooPoo and Co. dba McDonald’s. I have multiple positions with the company, among them my role as a General Manager of a restaurant, the supervisor of a second restaurant, and the Senior Manager for Training for our seven restaurant organization. Also as part of my employment, I receive a bonus plan, company subsidized health insurance, including major medical, dental vision, disability, and life insurance. I also have a 401K retirement plan, and other benefits which I would be forced to forfeit and unable to find if I were to relocate to Mexico. I also have served on committees for Corporate YOU KNOW, have been award Manager of the Year on multiple occasions, and won an award known as the LALALA Award, which is granted to the top 1% of managers in the United States in 2005. I was 1 of 138 managers to win this VERY prestigious award, and have served in various capacities in the WHOOHOO organization. If I were forced to leave the country to be with my wife, I would lose my seniority and tenure with the company, and would not be able to find an opportunity similar to the one I have now due to so many differences in the restaurant industry between the United State and Mexico. I have no knowledge of the Mexican structure in the restaurant industry, and would have almost no opportunity to succeed.

In addition to working for LALALA, I have spent time serving on committees for the National Restaurant Association Educational Foundation (NRAEF) based in Chicago, IL. I have been very fortunate to work on committees to help standardize testing for the food service industry. The NRAEF asked for my assistance due to my expertise, accolades, and experience, and it has been a great honor for me to be able to serve in this role. The rules and regulations that are used in the United States are very, very different and my experience from the United States would not serve me in the same capacity if I were fortunate enough to find work in Mexico. In Mexico, there is very little need with someone of my expertise due to the structure of their legal and health systems.

If I were to relocated to my wife’s native country of Mexico, it would be extremely difficult to find employment where I could succeed in the way I have in the United States. The area where my wife is located is primarily farming terrain on mountains, and my skills and college degree would be of virtually no value. I have my college degree from The Ohio State University, but this degree would not be well appreciated in Mexico, as most in Mexico would not understand the value of this degree. The closest town is approximately thirty minutes away, and there is virtually no employment opportunity in this area. I would not be able to find anything remotely close to my home, and even less, anything that would have wages equal to even half of my current wage structure without even taking into account my bonus potential.




EDUCATION

I am a proud graduate of The Ohio State University, and I earned my Bachelor’s of Science degree in Human Nutrition in 2002. Even with my college degree, it has been somewhat difficult for me to find an opportunity in a field in which my college degree could be used. I have searching for a way to fund furthering my education by returning to school for either a second degree or to work for a graduate degree in order to work in my field of study. Moving to Mexico would make it nearly impossible to further my studies, as I am not sufficiently fluent in Spanish to study at the university level in Mexico. My degree would not be fully recognized at a Mexican university, and I would have to virtually “start over” if I wanted to return to school. In the United States, I have opportunities abound to better myself further study.

MEDICAL

If I were forced to relocate to Mexico, I would not only face a serious reduction in wages, but would be subject to medical care with no health insurance in a remote area with the nearest major medical facility over two hours away. My wife and I would have to raise our children in an area with few doctors, and hope that our children are born healthy and that we all stay healthy. I am currently in need of medical care from two different doctors that I have been seeing for many years. As a college student, I was working and unfortunately, I severely injured my back to the point in which my doctor suggested surgery. While I have been able to function without the surgery to this date, I still have been told that I need to use extreme care in any activities that I participate, even while at work. I suffer from two herniated discs, which do inflame and cause me severe pain, to the point at in which it prevents me from walking and I am forced to take pain medication. It is in these moments in which I dearly miss the aid of my wife, as she made the severe pain bearable just by showing her smile and affection, not to mention that she was someone who could help me perform simple tasks, such as cooking and cleaning. I have provided a letter from Dr. John WHATCHAWHA, MD, who has been my doctor since I first injured my back. I am on prescription medications, such as percocet and vicodin, in an attempt to control the extreme pain from which I suffer. Dr. WHATCHAWHA’s letter fully outlines the seriousness of my condition.

I also have a letter from my personal doctor, Dr. Hosi INDIANGUY, MD, stating I am under his care for hypercholesterolemia. I have been under Dr. INDIANGUY’s care for years, and the recent discovery of high cholesterol has been an issue of serious concern. I am to be tested by Dr. Pamadan every three months until I have my cholesterol levels under control and it returns to a normal level. Finally, I have included another letter, from Dr. Angela Klingensmith, stating that she has been my regular dentist for the past XXX number of years. These doctor visits are critical to my health, well-being, and ultimately my life. Moving to Mexico, it is highly unlikely that I would be able to find doctors in Mexico who would be able to care for me and know my situation so well, especially in the area where my wife is located.


FAMILY

My parents, both of whom are United State Citizens, are getting older in age, and are beginning to slowly suffer from some health issues. My father was diagnosed two years ago as suffering from diabetes, and is now on a very strict diet and has a daily regimen in which he must check his blood sugar three times daily. My mother suffers from a variety of ailments, including high blood pressure, high cholesterol levels, allergy problems, anxiety, and takes a myriad of medications on a daily basis. My mother is on disability retirement, and cannot even work. My father is a substitute teacher, who is paid based on the numbers of days he works during a pay period. They do not have much income, and are not in the greatest of health, and therefore depend on me on practically a daily basis to help them.

Other than my parents, the only other person in my immediate family is one younger brother, who is a traveling occupational therapist. He is sent on assignments, several months at a time, to destinations across the United States. He was assigned to a facility in Florida, then Ohio, then back to Florida, and then will be sent to Illinois in the summer of 2008. With my parents’ medical condition, it is critical that one of their two children stay close to home, as any child would want to do for a parent who is not doing so well in health, let alone both of them. If I were even lucky enough to find employment in Mexico, the drastic reduction in wages would make it very difficult for me to visit my parents, especially if on a very short notice due to a sudden, more severe illness, than from those that they suffer from now.


FINANCIAL

In order to study at Ohio State, I had to use student loans totaling XXXXXXX to pay for my education. I am obligated by law to pay this money back, as it came from the federal government. In addition to this loan, I have credit debt amounting to XXXXXX, and a car loan in the amount of XXXXX from National City Bank. Moving to Mexico, there is almost no way I would be able to pay these obligations, my credit, which I have worked so hard to keep clean, would be destroyed, and any future in the United States would be a nightmare because of the poor credit situation.


MISCELLANEOUS

I am a of the Baptist religion, and moving to Mexico, it would be difficult for me to practice my religion in a country where over ninety percent of the population is Catholic. Based on the information provided on the United State State Department, in a statement issued on April 4, 2008, it is written clearly that United States Citizens should be VERY cautious in the country of Mexico.


CONCLUSION

The reason Ms. NoName and I married was to begin our lives together, united as one family. This separation while waiting immigration proceedings, has been very difficult for the both of us. It is difficult for me to take much time off from work, and cost prohibitive for me to visit my wife often. We are both suffering from the separation we are currently enduring, physically, mentally, emotionally, and spiritually. As I mentioned earlier, my wife and I speak on almost a daily basis, and I communicate with her daily by sending text messages. I am trying to be a strong husband, working hard to show my wife that we must maintain our strength and have faith in the immigration system, however this is much easier said that done.

I ask that our application be processed with thought to the suffering my wife and I have been enduring while we have been separated, and to the bleak future we would both face if we were forced to live in Mexico. I am proud to be a graduate of The Ohio State University, a proud employee of SOME Corporation, and a proud individual who has worked hard to be a model United States citizen. Please consider our situation, and our dream to raise children in a stable environment with high morals and ethics, as we teach them to be great contributors to the American society.

I thank you greatly for your valuable time.

stephluvju
06-01-2008, 05:16 PM
Papi - Your hardships are comparable to mine so I hope that they are 'extreme' enough. :) Your letter is very well written. Best wishes!

Laura
06-01-2008, 05:54 PM
I think you've done a good job wtih what you have. A couple picky things - this letter supports your I-601 waiver, not the I-130 petition. I mean, indirectly it does, but the I-130 is already approved, the reason you need this letter is to get your I-601 approved in order to get the visa.

Also, you start the intro mentioning hardships to your wife and yourself - you didn't discuss any hardships to her which is good, but I would take "wife" out of there.

As far as the other stuff, I might put the medical above the career. Your hardships are a lot like mine were as well. Nothing exceptional, but you've written everything you have really well. Just make sure you have ample evidence and you have a great shot at the immediate approval.

Papi
06-01-2008, 06:13 PM
Thanks.....I will make the changes and repost.

Papi
06-01-2008, 06:46 PM
Better?

To whom it may concern:

I am writing this letter in support of petition I-130 which I have filed for Ms. NoName NunyaBiz, and asking that she be granted legal residency to the United States of America. Ms. NoName and I were married on August 9, 2003, after just over a year of serious dating. We have lived together since the time of our marriage, and have grand plans in the future, including children and beginning to have our family. In over four years of marriage, our love has grown stronger daily, and dreams have grown larger, and the strength of our relationship is without boundaries.


INTRODUCTION

The purpose of my letter is to demonstrate the hardship my wife and I would be subject to if we were unable to pursue our dreams and life together in the United States. My wife voluntarily left the United States after filing the I-130 as a show of good faith, and we have been in contact via telephone almost every day. It has been very difficult for us to be apart after living with each other for the past four years. We have become accustomed to a life together, eating together, sleeping together, going shopping together….all of the little things in life that many take for granted.


MEDICAL

If I were forced to relocate to Mexico, I would not only face a serious reduction in wages, but would be subject to medical care with no health insurance in a remote area with the nearest major medical facility over two hours away. My wife and I would have to raise our children in an area with few doctors, and hope that our children are born healthy and that we all stay healthy. I am currently in need of medical care from two different doctors that I have been seeing for many years. As a college student, I was working and unfortunately, I severely injured my back to the point in which my doctor suggested surgery. While I have been able to function without the surgery to this date, I still have been told that I need to use extreme care in any activities that I participate, even while at work. I suffer from two herniated discs, which do inflame and cause me severe pain, to the point at in which it prevents me from walking and I am forced to take pain medication. It is in these moments in which I dearly miss the aid of my wife, as she made the severe pain bearable just by showing her smile and affection, not to mention that she was someone who could help me perform simple tasks, such as cooking and cleaning. I have provided a letter from Dr. John WHATCHAWHA, MD, who has been my doctor since I first injured my back. I am on prescription medications, such as percocet and vicodin, in an attempt to control the extreme pain from which I suffer. Dr. WHATCHAWHA’s letter fully outlines the seriousness of my condition.

I also have a letter from my personal doctor, Dr. Hosi INDIANGUY, MD, stating I am under his care for hypercholesterolemia. I have been under Dr. INDIANGUY’s care for years, and the recent discovery of high cholesterol has been an issue of serious concern. I am to be tested by Dr. Pamadan every three months until I have my cholesterol levels under control and it returns to a normal level. Finally, I have included another letter, from Dr. Angela Klingensmith, stating that she has been my regular dentist for the past XXX number of years. These doctor visits are critical to my health, well-being, and ultimately my life. Moving to Mexico, it is highly unlikely that I would be able to find doctors in Mexico who would be able to care for me and know my situation so well, especially in the area where my wife is located.


EMPLOYMENT

I have been employed by the same company for over twelve years, and have received several promotions and prestigious awards over the past few years as a result of very, very hard work, and many sleepless nights. My wife is unable to work in Mexico right now, because she is living with her family in a very remote area where employment opportunities are very scarce. In addition to paying my rent, utilities, student loan, car and insurance payments, and other daily expense, I am financially obligated to send money to my wife in order to help her with her daily expenses, due her inability to find employment.

As I mentioned, I am the recipient of several very prestigious awards from the A CERTAIN PLACE. I have become very established in my industry, and am well known in the state of Ohio for my accolades. It would be very difficult to find employment in Mexico with a salary comparable to the salary I am earning in the United States. As stated in the letter provided by my employer, I play an “intricate” role in my company’s daily operations. I am a general manager for company called PooPoo and Co. dba McDonald’s. I have multiple positions with the company, among them my role as a General Manager of a restaurant, the supervisor of a second restaurant, and the Senior Manager for Training for our seven restaurant organization. Also as part of my employment, I receive a bonus plan, company subsidized health insurance, including major medical, dental vision, disability, and life insurance. I also have a 401K retirement plan, and other benefits which I would be forced to forfeit and unable to find if I were to relocate to Mexico. I also have served on committees for Corporate YOU KNOW, have been award Manager of the Year on multiple occasions, and won an award known as the LALALA Award, which is granted to the top 1% of managers in the United States in 2005. I was 1 of 138 managers to win this VERY prestigious award, and have served in various capacities in the WHOOHOO organization. If I were forced to leave the country to be with my wife, I would lose my seniority and tenure with the company, and would not be able to find an opportunity similar to the one I have now due to so many differences in the restaurant industry between the United State and Mexico. I have no knowledge of the Mexican structure in the restaurant industry, and would have almost no opportunity to succeed.

In addition to working for LALALA, I have spent time serving on committees for the National Restaurant Association Educational Foundation (NRAEF) based in Chicago, IL. I have been very fortunate to work on committees to help standardize testing for the food service industry. The NRAEF asked for my assistance due to my expertise, accolades, and experience, and it has been a great honor for me to be able to serve in this role. The rules and regulations that are used in the United States are very, very different and my experience from the United States would not serve me in the same capacity if I were fortunate enough to find work in Mexico. In Mexico, there is very little need with someone of my expertise due to the structure of their legal and health systems.

If I were to relocated to my wife’s native country of Mexico, it would be extremely difficult to find employment where I could succeed in the way I have in the United States. The area where my wife is located is primarily farming terrain on mountains, and my skills and college degree would be of virtually no value. I have my college degree from The Ohio State University, but this degree would not be well appreciated in Mexico, as most in Mexico would not understand the value of this degree. The closest town is approximately thirty minutes away, and there is virtually no employment opportunity in this area. I would not be able to find anything remotely close to my home, and even less, anything that would have wages equal to even half of my current wage structure without even taking into account my bonus potential.




EDUCATION

I am a proud graduate of The Ohio State University, and I earned my Bachelor’s of Science degree in Human Nutrition in 2002. Even with my college degree, it has been somewhat difficult for me to find an opportunity in a field in which my college degree could be used. I have searching for a way to fund furthering my education by returning to school for either a second degree or to work for a graduate degree in order to work in my field of study. Moving to Mexico would make it nearly impossible to further my studies, as I am not sufficiently fluent in Spanish to study at the university level in Mexico. My degree would not be fully recognized at a Mexican university, and I would have to virtually “start over” if I wanted to return to school. In the United States, I have opportunities abound to better myself further study.


FAMILY

My parents, both of whom are United State Citizens, are getting older in age, and are beginning to slowly suffer from some health issues. My father was diagnosed two years ago as suffering from diabetes, and is now on a very strict diet and has a daily regimen in which he must check his blood sugar three times daily. My mother suffers from a variety of ailments, including high blood pressure, high cholesterol levels, allergy problems, anxiety, and takes a myriad of medications on a daily basis. My mother is on disability retirement, and cannot even work. My father is a substitute teacher, who is paid based on the numbers of days he works during a pay period. They do not have much income, and are not in the greatest of health, and therefore depend on me on practically a daily basis to help them.

Other than my parents, the only other person in my immediate family is one younger brother, who is a traveling occupational therapist. He is sent on assignments, several months at a time, to destinations across the United States. He was assigned to a facility in Florida, then Ohio, then back to Florida, and then will be sent to Illinois in the summer of 2008. With my parents’ medical condition, it is critical that one of their two children stay close to home, as any child would want to do for a parent who is not doing so well in health, let alone both of them. If I were even lucky enough to find employment in Mexico, the drastic reduction in wages would make it very difficult for me to visit my parents, especially if on a very short notice due to a sudden, more severe illness, than from those that they suffer from now.


FINANCIAL

In order to study at Ohio State, I had to use student loans totaling XXXXXXX to pay for my education. I am obligated by law to pay this money back, as it came from the federal government. In addition to this loan, I have credit debt amounting to XXXXXX, and a car loan in the amount of XXXXX from National City Bank. Moving to Mexico, there is almost no way I would be able to pay these obligations, my credit, which I have worked so hard to keep clean, would be destroyed, and any future in the United States would be a nightmare because of the poor credit situation.


MISCELLANEOUS

I am a of the Baptist religion, and moving to Mexico, it would be difficult for me to practice my religion in a country where over ninety percent of the population is Catholic. Based on the information provided on the United State State Department, in a statement issued on April 4, 2008, it is written clearly that United States Citizens should be VERY cautious in the country of Mexico.


CONCLUSION

The reason Ms. NoName and I married was to begin our lives together, united as one family. This separation while waiting immigration proceedings, has been very difficult for the both of us. It is difficult for me to take much time off from work, and cost prohibitive for me to visit my wife often. We are both suffering from the separation we are currently enduring, physically, mentally, emotionally, and spiritually. As I mentioned earlier, my wife and I speak on almost a daily basis, and I communicate with her daily by sending text messages. I am trying to be a strong husband, working hard to show my wife that we must maintain our strength and have faith in the immigration system, however this is much easier said that done.

I ask that our application be processed with thought to the suffering my wife and I have been enduring while we have been separated, and to the bleak future we would both face if we were forced to live in Mexico. I am proud to be a graduate of The Ohio State University, a proud employee of SOME Corporation, and a proud individual who has worked hard to be a model United States citizen. Please consider our situation, and our dream to raise children in a stable environment with high morals and ethics, as we teach them to be great contributors to the American society.

I thank you greatly for your valuable time.

JJCT
06-01-2008, 07:04 PM
Well done Papi!

Papi
06-01-2008, 07:41 PM
But Is It Enough?!?!!?!?

JJCT
06-01-2008, 07:44 PM
I think it's enough. It's very well written. I am not an expert on Hardship letters but yours sounds really good to me.

Brisa6
06-01-2008, 08:40 PM
It looks good, best wishes.

MBLA
06-01-2008, 09:36 PM
I would suggest adding more about the hardships that you already have faced being separated. If I was the adjuncter I would say they are already apart and they have survived. I think you need to show why you can not go on being apart.

Also, what type of evidence do you have to go with the letter?

Papi
06-01-2008, 10:28 PM
I would suggest adding more about the hardships that you already have faced being separated. If I was the adjuncter I would say they are already apart and they have survived. I think you need to show why you can not go on being apart.

Also, what type of evidence do you have to go with the letter?

Thanks to all.


-letters from doctors
-bank statements
-401k statement
-credit report
-student loan statement
-tons of photos of the wedding to show it was legit
-copies of bills from back in Sept 07 with BOTH names on the bills to prove marriage is legit, and then recent copies of the same bills, Mar 08
-work letter
-baptism certificate
-proof she left the country voluntarily when filing I130
-US State Dept warning of travel to Mexico








I will finish this up in the coming week. I have a lawyer who is going to review all of it. Then I will have it put in a binder professionally and send it to her to take to the interview. Will look very, very nice and pro.




letter too long/short?

What other things can I dwell on right now?

MBLA
06-01-2008, 10:52 PM
In your evidence you really don't need to show that your marriage is bona fide. They will decide that at the visa interview. You need to show your hardships. Not saying take it all out stuff that shows your bona fide. Pics are good. Not just of your wedding, pics of you guys throughout your relationship.

Possible get a letter from your employer.
Bills are good, but to show your financial burdens. If you can show that its been hard paying for everything while she has been gone.

If she is denied, would you move to Mexico or stay here? I get from your letter you would stay here. How often would you want to go visit her. How much would plane tickets, phone calls ect to be able to visit her if hubby is denied?

I so far my letter is 10 pages and I have over 38 pieces of evidence. I am showing why I can't move to Mexico and also why I can't stay here.

Hope that helps.

Papi
06-02-2008, 09:55 AM
^thats great stuff, about the plane tickets and what not....

Thanks!

mayita
06-03-2008, 07:19 PM
You really need to try to get more evidence of things..first make sure you include a copy of your diploma.

Also, awards and promotions are great but you didnt even mention how much money you made! That, to me, would seem important. You need to compare the money you make here to what you would make there. Look up the minimun wage in Mx, use that as evidence. Do you have medical reports documenting the herniated discs? Also, it wouldnt hurt if you can get something from your church saying you're a member.

BTW..Where,roughly, are in Oh?
Good Luck to you!!

Salsa2
06-03-2008, 07:35 PM
Your employer has restaurants in Mexico too, right? Can you get a letter from corporate office or some head honcho saying that they are unable to transfer you to a position in Mexico b/c you are not qualified for the same position there and even in you were, the salary is only $_________ and not nearly enough to support a family on.

Also, be careful about disclosing 401(k) info. The adjudicator may look at how much you have in there and wonder why you can't just cash it out and move to Mexico. This is what Laurel's advice to me was on the subject. I guess it depends on how much you have in there. I had enough in mine to buy a modest home in Mexico, so it was best not to include that info.

JennyM
06-03-2008, 08:09 PM
Last night I found a picture book and started printing out pictures of me and hubby sorta in order, @ new years eve 2006, the zoo, ripleys, and I'm putting them in order from skinniest to fattest back to skinniest...ha ha, and I'm having hubby bring that....I didn't put any picts of the wedding in there since I already sent them with my packet.

JennyM
06-03-2008, 08:10 PM
Also, you said you help your parents what exactly do you do? give them money, if so, you can have them write a letter attesting that you help them financially and put that in your letter.

sandra191406
06-07-2008, 04:58 AM
Also, be careful about disclosing 401(k) info. The adjudicator may look at how much you have in there and wonder why you can't just cash it out and move to Mexico. This is what Laurel's advice to me was on the subject. I guess it depends on how much you have in there. I had enough in mine to buy a modest home in Mexico, so it was best not to include that info



Wow I didn't know this... :eek1: now I don't know if I should inlcude my 401K info in my HSL....